What condescending tripe that is! An educator should encourage and support, not ridicule. You are a disgrace. You are also assuming an awful amount based on one request for assistance with course work... Which suggests to me it is an essay for academic purposes, not a job application. Quite apart from the fact that you suggest writing in a different language when it's entirely possible the reason she is asking for help is that the paper is required to be written in English. I pity your poor students if that is your attitude towards a learner. You certainly shouldn't be casting aspersions about her moral compass for having the audacity to ask for input on an essay about teaching practice on a forum designed for teachers. It's not her fault that the number of real teachers on this board could be counted on the toes on my left foot! And before you imply it, no, I am not endorsing plagiarism. The internet is a wonderful tool for research and should be used as such to shape and form ideas.

Sammy, please ignore him, your English level is fine to write an academic essay; from what you posted (assuming it isn't copied and pasted) you would sit somewhere around the upper B2 level on the CEFR for your writing and it was a good example of an essay plan at the lower FCE level. It does need more focus and more information before I could advise you further, as my previous post stated, but from what you've got so far it's a good start.