I take back what I said about your English level! You're clearly a native speaker! I was thrown a little by your initial post as there weren't a lot of discourse markers and I am so used to reading essay plans of L2 speakers! My apologies!

If you can give me a little more info about the focus of your essay I will be happy to help you further with insights gained from.11 years teaching in various countries. I also would understand entirely if you don't want to have this conversation publicly for the degenerates in here to pick apart, so feel free to email me privately if you want. My email is beth.livermore @ yahoo.co.uk